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The Mystery of the Missing Mango Tree!

FimFiction Link - Short ID: 474448/the-mystery-of-the-missing-mango-tree

Published: Aug '20

Review in No. 37094660
>compact, but well paced
>simple and straightforward plot
>silly ending befitting the premise
>somewhat dry story and characters
>needed more humor
>first person narrative lacks descriptive details

As the title indicates, a silly bat pony plotted fic where a noir detective follows a mango tree thief into Equestria's wild west. While it's a shorter oneshot, the pacing was surprisingly well done. It didn't seem too rushed or too slow. The first person noir narration suffered a little from the MC being kind of boring and being kind of shit at describing things and characters' appearances. Given the absurd premise and resolution, it also could have been a lot funnier, which only would have been an improvement. Still, a nice shorter noir fic to whet the appetite.