/mlp/ Fanfic Reviews

The Accidental Invasion

FimFiction Link - Short ID: 495664/the-accidental-invasion

Published: May '21Nov '21

Review in No. 37861176
This fic is by the same author as The Boy Who Disappeared (a.k.a. Hailey Potter), though it's not quite as wild so far (as of chapter 12).

The premise is as follows:
>Lyra opens a portal to HP-Earth
>due to magical shenanigans, anypony who goes through the portal turns into an 11-year-old human, regardless of actual age
>due to magical shenanigans, about 30,000 ponies get invited to Hogwarts, on top of the normal ~40 human students

Around 12,000 ponies of all ages end up attending Hogwarts as 11-year-old human children. This involves a three-tiered "student instructor" system, where the Hogwarts professors teach normal-sized classes consisting of only the top student instructors, then the top instructors teach the other instructors, and the other instructors teach the thousands of individual students. This system is obviously completely insane, even considering that most of the instructors are adults, including a bunch of professional teachers and professors.

You can tell this is by the same author as Hailey Potter because it has the same issue of the Hogwarts professors having zero agency. Dumbledore and McGonagall are invariably either playing catch-up or just going along with whatever insane thing the main characters are doing today. This starts very early in the fic, with McGonagall delivering Lyra's letter, only to find that Lyra already knows who McGonagall is and what the letter's about.

The major characters here are:
>Harry, who has rapid healing and turns into a girl when he gets hurt
>Hermione, who starts inventing new spells in her first month at Hogwarts, based on secret techniques taught to her by Pinkie Pie
>Draco, who's a generic good guy in this fic (the sorting hat wanted to put him in Gryffindor) but has yet to do anything interesting
>Bon Bon, who for whatever reason is in charge of the entire student instructor program

Aside from all the weirdness (which I find plenty entertaining), one thing I appreciate about this fic is that the author properly skips over the less interesting parts. There's a scene of Hailey at the robe shop, for example, but the rest of the Diagon Alley shopping sequence is omitted. This keeps the pacing up at lets the story get to the crazy parts quicker.

On the other hand, I'm a bit disappointed that the story so far has failed to expand on the fact that Muggles can see the Leaky Cauldron on TV even though it's invisible to them in person.

I wouldn't recommend this fic in general, but if you're looking for something weird, or you like seeing Harry, Hermione, and various ponies being OP, this might be up your alley.
Review in No. 37863478
Update as of chapter 20. Harry has decided he likes being a girl and has been hitting himself in the face with a textbook almost every day. Another character saw himself as a girl in the Mirror of Erised and is working on a spell that will let him transform at will. So far this reads mostly like normal TFTG to me, where the characters just kind of roll with it and don't get too uptight about muh dysphoria or muh pronouns, but there are a couple points where a character explicitly asks if so-and-so is transgender (and then has to explain what "transgenderism" is). I can live with this, but I know some anons can't.

To give you an idea of the pacing, chapter 20 is the last chapter of the summer break after everyone's first year.