FimFiction Link - Short ID: 424051/harmony
Published: Nov '18
Centuries before HWE, demigods and alicorns battle it out in a Dark Souls-style lore narration. There's nothing structurally wrong with the story, it was just wasn't gripping at all. It's hard to care about pre-HWE characters in a 100k fic, let alone a 6k one that reads more like a summary than a story. Made worse by the narrator really keeping things distant. There's only a few lines of dialogue so you really can't connect with anyone who's brought up, making the whole thing feel like a waste of time.