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Troubles Over Hot Chocolate

FimFiction Link - Short ID: 236736/troubles-over-hot-chocolate

Published: Dec '14

Review in No. 39609857
Sprinkle Medley skipped a shift in Ponyville's Weather Team and now Dash comes to see her and ask what the hell is going on.
I'm not sure how to feel about this one. It's good. I feel confident saying that much. But it's a 3,6k word one-shot written entirely around the inner conflict of a background pony. A good chunk of the story is spent explaining her backstory and motivations, and while that's fine, I feel it's just a lore dump about why this pony isn't fond of snow and the expectations placed upon her. If this had been the emotional climax of a longer character piece, I think it would've been excellent. As it's own, single chaptered story, though... It's okay.