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Locomotive Breath

FimFiction Link - Short ID: 525913/locomotive-breath

Published: Oct '22

Review in No. 39531902

After the Royal Guard raid a necormancy cult, they retreat on a train with the undead leader stored in her sarcophagus when some of the armored ponies hear a noise on the roof. Very well done oneshot, particularly with the narrator casting aside the POV character when needed to build the growing tension and dread before the big climactic reveal. A nicely done reveal as well, even if you suspect it from the strange ambiguity the narration uses at times. Wish more oneshots played with the expectations and protagonists.