FimFiction Link - Short ID: 8319/my-little-pony---hospice
Published: Jan '12 — Jun '12
"My little pony - hospice" is a 65 thousand words long drama describing the tumultuous relationship between an unnamed narrator and Rarity before and after her admission into a hospice.
This is a great, but heavy story. And i mean "heavy" in the sense of emotional impact and the atmosphere. The prose is very good, consistently high-quality through the entire story and from the technical point of view this fanfic is just a pleasure to read. Rarity and the Narrator are both extremely vivid and realistic characters, and you very quickly get invested into the story of their relationship.
The fanfic doesn't stick to linear time progression and is instead broken up in a multitude of scenes happening at different times - 12/1/4/8 months before some unknown date the narrator is counting towards, so as the story progresses you get bits as pieces of the plot that slowly coalesce into a solid picture, and i have to say that the author does an excellent job with this format. Despite constant time jumps the narrative doesn't feel disjointed at all and small elements from earlier chapters and previous months inevitably come back at just the right time, helping to tie the story together.
Now, moving on from more technical parts of the story. It is a tragedy. Throughout the entire story i couldn't shake this feeling of something heavy pushing down on me. You know what is gonna happen, what the end will be, and yet the fanfic keeps you invested and you keep reading on. Despite all his flaws you can't help but sympathize with the main character and stick up with his obsessive persona through ups and downs of his relationship with Rarity. This is a story of passion, of obsession, of love, and of inevitability of certain things in life which you cannot escape or change no matter how much you want to and how much it hurts. I can't recommend this story to everyone because, again, it's some heavy stuff, but one thing i can say for certain - it will not leave you indifferent. Read it if you want to feel.